Lullabies pulled the young ones into slumber. Dreams formed like rainbows while they slept and that warmth soothed them in the darkness. Crickets sang their melodies and the world closed its weary eyes.
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Written for the weekend Trifextra Challenge: The editors of Trifecta are tired. Hectic summer plans, last minute school shopping and prep for courses of our own have us drifting off in front of the computer. Any millisecond we can shave off of our busy schedules could potentially improve the quality of our lives as well as the lives of those around us. This weekend, we’re enlisting your help in shortening our considerably lengthy bedtime routines by giving us a children’s bedtime story in exactly 33 words. It can be an old favorite reimagined or a work that is entirely your own. We only ask that your story not leave our kids with visions of the boogie man dancing in their heads. These tired bones thank you in advance.
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This is very sweet and comforting.
Thank you very much.
The world closing its weary eyes is so beautiful. I loved it.
Thank you. I appreciate that.
So poetic..Couldn’t have said that any better.
Thank you.
Lovely words.
Thank you to you as well. 🙂
Lovely, soothing piece!
Thank you….I’m glad you felt that way.
As I read this, the crickets are singing their song (quite loudly, I might add.) Yes, it’s almost time for these weary eyes to close, too.
Tender and loving and lovely, I am really enjoying this weeks tales. Love the imagery of rainbow dreams.
Thank you very much.
I feel obligated to tell you how much of an impression this poem and, more importantly, watching your son read it aloud on Trifecta’s Facebook page, has made on me. Your poem is wonderful enough as it is on this page. However, seeing how your words came alive through the voice of your son is profoundly moving and an amazing extension of what we do on our blogs when we write all that we write. You have brought the reading-writing connection to life in a very personal way. You have inspired me to take a second look at my own entry and to work harder to produce better work. I deeply appreciate your work this weekend. Thank you very much. 🙂
Your comment just made every word I’ve ever written seem so much more important. I saw the video and was moved to tears. Thank you so much for the comment and for posting the video. You may have just made my entire year!! 🙂
I just re-read your comment and I thought you were talking about your son reading it. Dylan is not my son….I’ve never met him. But I do love the impact his reading my words had on both of us.
You pulled in all senses, wraped them in a sweet, happy, safe, and kind warm feeling, making 33 words pure serenity
Wow – what a beautiful comment. Thank you.
You are welcome, and Thank you back:) When I was little I’d read this story (?title) in nature made up of the most kind, interesting and productive inhabitants. I wanted to live there, within that reality that was so safe and full of kindness and goodness. Thank you for letting me feel as that story used to, through your story
This is such a wonderful piece!
Thank you so much.
I’m glad you liked the video of my son reading your piece. It led to a discussion about crickets and singing and camping. 🙂 So thank you for that. This is a lovely bedtime story. Thanks for linking up.
That meant more to me than you know…..thank you for that!