It begins as a slow, muted staccato beat.
The intense reverberation increases when I am in his presence.
The rhythmic tempo pumps,
and lures me into its passionate song.
The hammering echoes off my rib cage,
playing my feelings like a xylophone.
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polysyllabic profundities 
Great final image–I can hear it!
Thanks very much.
Love this, you capture the first flush of love/lust/passion well in so few words.
Thank you. I appreciate that.
Falling in love is one of my favorite sounds. Hammering hearts, quick breaths…sigh.
Very nice write.
Thanks Kir!
Well done! The sound of infatuation/love…:-)
Thank you!
I like that final line. Very good!
Thanks very much.
I’m with Joe….that last line is so particularly evocative. Great 🙂
Thanks CC!
Great job–loved the title and last line
Thanks very much.
Wow! I love the imagery of this. Well done!
Thank you!
Perfectly described, and I love the rhyme.
Thank you Kymm!
I’ve never seen the skeletal system used to convey emotion before. Niiice.
🙂 Thank you very much!
My favorite phrase – “The hammering echoes off my rib cage,” lovely write.
Thank you very much.
Ahhh, the music of love 😀
No better sound. 😀
“The hammering echoes off my rib cage,
playing my feelings like a xylophone.” – My favorite line today! Rhythm of romance- Wow!
Wow….thanks so much!
i love the use of ‘hammering’ here. it depicts so well the strokes of mallets against a xylophone. i’m a musician at heart and this piece totally speaks my language. props!
Thank you! Much appreciated. 🙂