He asked for my forgiveness
and in my continuing silence
I found an abundance of long-buried strength.
~
Daunted by the conviction of my strength,
and with no more interest in asking for my forgiveness,
he returned my stare with his silence.
~
There was nothing golden about our silence.
But in that quiet, there was no weakness in my strength.
And because of that, never will he receive my forgiveness.
~
Forgiveness should never be assumed. His feeble request was met by deserved silence and fueled by my inner strength.
My first ever attempt at a Tritina for YeahWrite.Me
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I find Tritina a tricky one. It’s interesting to see different approaches. The second stanza is my favorite. I could see the emotional walls. If you don’t mind my saying, the word inane somehow threw things off in my inner ear. I don’t have a technical term for you! It was like a record scratch when I got to it. Just my feelings on it 😃. Everyone reads a poem so differently. I thought my ghastly was creepy, someone else thought it beautiful. Lol
Thanks for the feedback…I do appreciate it. 🙂
And my autocorrect changed ghazal to ghastly. Blech.
Lol….I just changed inane to feeble and it fits much better. Thanks!
Some thought your ghastly was creepy, lolol! 🙂
Lol
“..in my continuing silence
I found an abundance of long-buried strength”
Love this!
Thank you so much. 🙂
Very nice! Looks like you nailed it. 🙂
🙂 Thanks very much.
Wonderfully done, and the emotional impact is nicely preserved.
Thank you so much.
Well done! G-uno
Thank you!
Good job! I like the play on “nothing golden about our silence”.
Thanks very much!
You captured the Last Straw moment of a relationship well. I like how the narrator held onto her convictions. I would have liked to see more of this scene. Like where were they? what sparked this showdown? What were they wearing? Not all of that, but something to help me see them.
Thank you for the compliment and the feedback. It was a first attempt at Tritina but won’t be my last. 🙂