Like a charcoal sketch,
I see myself outlined his eyes,
I see my silhouette as he sees me.
So vastly different
from my reflection in the mirror.
But I follow deep into the abyss,
into the portrait he has created of me.
I follow those lines,
to try to see what he sees.
In my mind I trace the outline
following each stroke of the pencil.
And I journey
as deep as I can go,
swimming in his reality of me,
truly understanding how he sees me.
I may have changed a few lines,
but to him I am perfection.
Written for the 100 Word Song Challenge at My Blog Can Beat Up Your Blog. This week’s song is Deep As You Go, by October Project.
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Oh this is so beautiful! ‘To him I am perfection’.. just lovely 🙂
Thank you very much.
This is beautiful, Susan. I like the drowning/swimming theme throughout and trying to see what someone else does (don’t we usually see ourselves differently- less forgiving- than others do?) Great last line!
Thanks so much Janna. This one flowed really quickly.
Ahhhh! I felt like I’d just fallen in love when I read this 😀
That’s also a great picture!
Thank you….it was written with a sense of hope. 🙂
Beautiful, Susan…simply beautiful. I get a sense from your writing that your heart was broken. If so, I hope it’s healing.
Your interpretation makes me feel like I’m reading something intimate, something I shouldn’t. I love those opening 4 lines.
“I see myself outlined in his eyes….into the portrait he has created of me”—such exquisitely beautiful lines. They evoke images of deeply unconditional love. (And great picture to go with the post, too!)
thank you so much!
It would be lovely to catch a glimpse of how those who love us see us.
I wish I could see myself as other people see me. I probably wouldn’t recognize that person.
I feel the same.
Beautiful! It’s a love poem to him, and to yourself through his eyes. Very cool, and very romantic. Just wonderful.
Thank you so much….I really appreciate that.